First, I really like the format and flow of your cover letter, but there are a few suggestions that I have. In the second paragraph, you state “My previous field engineering work and my experience from school makes me feel I would be a great fit for this position and for your company.” And then, you go onto talk about something different. I think that after a statement like this, you should give some examples of your previous field engineering work and experience form school, and why it makes you a good candidate. Just brief examples, you don’t have to be too wordy.
In the next paragraph, I like the description of one of the projects you completed, and I really like the fact that you say what your work will be used for. It is always a good thing to show a prospective employer that something you have worked on is being implemented and is affecting the company. One thing to note about this paragraph, try not to use words or phrases that imply you are being forced to do something. For example, you say “occasionally required to” and “had to work overtime”. You don’t want to tell your prospective employer that you are the type of person that has to be told to do something. You want to show that you are willing and able to do these things, with no problems. Also, I get a little bit lost in this paragraph. That might just be me, but if possible, I would try to clean it up and shorten it a bit.
I like the next paragraph. It points out your skills very well. But, I would change a few things about this section. Not that you don’t want to give your mentor credit, but you want to highlight your skills, not his. So, instead of saying you solved problems with him, and he taught you a lot, say that you yourself helped solve problems, and that you learned about a lot. And, I’m not sure if you really need the last sentence.
I liked the format of your resume, too. I like that you use the same header, so it ties the cover letter and the resume together. It is very well organized and clear to read. I really like the bulleted descriptions of what you accomplished in your work experience.
Overall, well done. And, I hope my comments help. Good luck in your future career!
Your cover letter and resume both look really good. Together and separate they show that you are definitely qualified for an electrical engineering job. I also like that the headings on both are the same, it really gives it a professional look. The only thing I noticed that you are lacking on your cover letter is the company's information. You may want to include the company name, address, and such information in the heading of the letter. Also you may want to include a little more company info in the opening paragraph in order to show your interest with that company and not just the position. Your resume is very impressive. I can tell you have put some time into this important document. Your technical skills and work experience say a lot for you. However there was one minor thing I see that could be changed is that where you state that you have references available upon request is on a second page. You may want to bump that up to be included at the bottom of the first page. Other than those minor fixes, both documents look great, the H.R. representative should be pleased not to reject your application.
First off, I really like the format of your cover letter. I like how you broke each paragraph into subject matters. I do however feel like there are several things that you could improve on within your cover letter. First, I feel that you should list the source where you found this job posting/ listing. Secondly, I feel like you keep using the same terminology ( I was, I did). You can turn this into a positive by using phrases like: while I was interning at General Electric I completed tasks such as: A, B, and C or during my past work experiences I have learned through numerous problems that occurred and I was responsible to fix the problems. There is a lot of very good substance within this cover letter and I feel once you adjust some of your phrases into past experiences and on the job training you will have a very adequate cover letter.
For your resume, I actually think this is one of the best resumes that I have seen before. One of your biggest strengths is that you have a large amount of work experience to display and that is definitely going to help you down the road. One of the weaknesses that I noticed is that you don’t have a job objective, or related coursework. This is something I believe you are going to have to develop in order to be successful with this resume. The job objective is essential to any job applicant and it is needed to help the recruiter focus. I think once you make those recommended changes you will be well on your way a successful resume.
First off, everything I've read everywhere suggests you list your education as the first thing on your resume. You should also put when you expect to get your degree and the level. Bachelors in Electrical and Computer Engineering Expected _____. You should also be sure to remove the hyperlinks from your resume, unless you've found something elsewhere that says hyperlinks are okay to keep in your resume. It may mess up the scannability and printing capabilities.
A really nit picky detail, but you use two different size dashes throughout the resume. Try to keep these consistent. Under the General Electric Internship, the Summer Internship and Field Services have tow different dash sizes, small being first, larger being second. If this was intentional, then ignore it.
You're section headings are smaller than your job titles, and I think get lost in the resume. Maybe try playing with the fonts so that the headings are very clearly seperated and stand out.
In your cover letter, Ihave a few other small comments. If you're actually applying for the job, and found the job on the careers, list the requisition number if it's a specific job. "I heard about the job through your internet site careers" reads as a very akward sentence. I would reword it as "I found the job on the career section of the (company name) website."
Cover Letter and Resume Response
First, I really like the format and flow of your cover letter, but there are a few suggestions that I have. In the second paragraph, you state “My previous field engineering work and my experience from school makes me feel I would be a great fit for this position and for your company.” And then, you go onto talk about something different. I think that after a statement like this, you should give some examples of your previous field engineering work and experience form school, and why it makes you a good candidate. Just brief examples, you don’t have to be too wordy.
In the next paragraph, I like the description of one of the projects you completed, and I really like the fact that you say what your work will be used for. It is always a good thing to show a prospective employer that something you have worked on is being implemented and is affecting the company. One thing to note about this paragraph, try not to use words or phrases that imply you are being forced to do something. For example, you say “occasionally required to” and “had to work overtime”. You don’t want to tell your prospective employer that you are the type of person that has to be told to do something. You want to show that you are willing and able to do these things, with no problems. Also, I get a little bit lost in this paragraph. That might just be me, but if possible, I would try to clean it up and shorten it a bit.
I like the next paragraph. It points out your skills very well. But, I would change a few things about this section. Not that you don’t want to give your mentor credit, but you want to highlight your skills, not his. So, instead of saying you solved problems with him, and he taught you a lot, say that you yourself helped solve problems, and that you learned about a lot. And, I’m not sure if you really need the last sentence.
I liked the format of your resume, too. I like that you use the same header, so it ties the cover letter and the resume together. It is very well organized and clear to read. I really like the bulleted descriptions of what you accomplished in your work experience.
Overall, well done. And, I hope my comments help. Good luck in your future career!
Your cover letter and resume
Your cover letter and resume both look really good. Together and separate they show that you are definitely qualified for an electrical engineering job. I also like that the headings on both are the same, it really gives it a professional look. The only thing I noticed that you are lacking on your cover letter is the company's information. You may want to include the company name, address, and such information in the heading of the letter. Also you may want to include a little more company info in the opening paragraph in order to show your interest with that company and not just the position. Your resume is very impressive. I can tell you have put some time into this important document. Your technical skills and work experience say a lot for you. However there was one minor thing I see that could be changed is that where you state that you have references available upon request is on a second page. You may want to bump that up to be included at the bottom of the first page. Other than those minor fixes, both documents look great, the H.R. representative should be pleased not to reject your application.
A solid start
First off, I really like the format of your cover letter. I like how you broke each paragraph into subject matters. I do however feel like there are several things that you could improve on within your cover letter. First, I feel that you should list the source where you found this job posting/ listing. Secondly, I feel like you keep using the same terminology ( I was, I did). You can turn this into a positive by using phrases like: while I was interning at General Electric I completed tasks such as: A, B, and C or during my past work experiences I have learned through numerous problems that occurred and I was responsible to fix the problems. There is a lot of very good substance within this cover letter and I feel once you adjust some of your phrases into past experiences and on the job training you will have a very adequate cover letter.
For your resume, I actually think this is one of the best resumes that I have seen before. One of your biggest strengths is that you have a large amount of work experience to display and that is definitely going to help you down the road. One of the weaknesses that I noticed is that you don’t have a job objective, or related coursework. This is something I believe you are going to have to develop in order to be successful with this resume. The job objective is essential to any job applicant and it is needed to help the recruiter focus. I think once you make those recommended changes you will be well on your way a successful resume.
Peer Edits.
First off, everything I've read everywhere suggests you list your education as the first thing on your resume. You should also put when you expect to get your degree and the level. Bachelors in Electrical and Computer Engineering Expected _____. You should also be sure to remove the hyperlinks from your resume, unless you've found something elsewhere that says hyperlinks are okay to keep in your resume. It may mess up the scannability and printing capabilities.
A really nit picky detail, but you use two different size dashes throughout the resume. Try to keep these consistent. Under the General Electric Internship, the Summer Internship and Field Services have tow different dash sizes, small being first, larger being second. If this was intentional, then ignore it.
You're section headings are smaller than your job titles, and I think get lost in the resume. Maybe try playing with the fonts so that the headings are very clearly seperated and stand out.
In your cover letter, Ihave a few other small comments. If you're actually applying for the job, and found the job on the careers, list the requisition number if it's a specific job. "I heard about the job through your internet site careers" reads as a very akward sentence. I would reword it as "I found the job on the career section of the (company name) website."