Resume Rough Draft - Employment Project Step 2

1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
In objective section, you don’t have to mention that you want to be a vice president, because it’s too specific, they won’t care about that, and thus make your objective statement not effective.
The details for your Project coordinator are too many; maybe you can put some of them in 1 sentence.

2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The layout is good. My suggestion would be to add 1 more line below your address, just to separate your contacts and other information. Maybe you can use table for your current and permanent address, so that you can right aligned your permanent address to make your resume looks tidier.
In addition, I think “present address” is not a good choice of word; you may want to use current address or campus address.

3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
Yes, it does. I know that you don’t have more space to put your computer experiences, but the way you put them now is not too good, because the words seem to be jumbled around and it’s ruin the columns in your resume.

4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
It’s easily readable. Since there’s not much space left, it’s better to decrease the size of all “Times New Roman” words that you use, to make your subject headings more stand out.

5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
Yes it does. I think you did a good job in using headers, bold and italics.

6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
Most of important information located on the left side of the page and near the top. I think the name of company you worked is more important than the position and duty, so it should be place before them.

7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes, it does. You did a good job in using the keywords “project manager, construction, and management”.

8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
The resume isn’t too short. I think all bullet points you made are quite effective, although some parts are too short and unclear.

9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
Yes

10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
Yes. I am not sure if you list all items in those bullets based on their importance.

11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
Since there are a lot of bullet points, you tend to repeat several words to start the phrase. You might need to see those active verbs from our instructor for a more professional choice of words.

12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests (See attached document below for help with these tests)? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
It passes squint and distance tests.
On quadrant test, I think if you make table for your honor and activities to separate them from the dates, you’ll get some words too in the right side.
On column test, I’ll say you’re almost there. You just have to make changes in your computer skills and also don’t forget to make all dates in your resume to be in the same column.

13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
Please be more consistent in writing dates on the honors and activities.
Don’t use “two semesters”, instead, give the exact dates.
Since you got “Semester honor and Dean’s list” continuously, it is better to use “Spring 2006-present”

Hope all my comments help!

1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
-I think that the objective is pretty clear-cut and gets the point across, maybe even a little too much with the addition of the high hopes of being vice one day. I'm not sure if Id be that precise. But other than that the resume shows the qualifications relevant to the job applying for.

2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
-Yes, the layout is simple yet alluring and was easy to follow without getting distracted.

3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
-Yes, cleanly onto one page.

4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
-Yes, I like all the fonts used and all the sections are easily identifiable.

5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
-Yes it does.

6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
-Yes, all the relevant and most important information is in the right order based on the objective from what I understand. I would maybe put the dates of your experience higher next to the name of the company you worked for because seem to melt in with the one below it.

7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
- Yes, all the information from experience to major is relevant. As I stated earlier however, I feel that the objective needs to be a little more concise in another way other than the promotion of the position.

8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
-No, I think it provides everything that needs to said and it fits nicely onto one page.

9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
-Yes, it is.

10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
-I would put all of the verbs in past tense to make it sound better.

11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
-

12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests (See attached document below for help with these tests)? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
-It passes the test, especially the squint tests.

13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
-It is a very good resume and I think it would fare well with your employer, at least score you an interview.