Webmail Paper

Here is the correct version of my Webmail paper.
Submitted by LanaRyan on Thu, 05/29/2008 - 09:57. categories [ ]

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Submitted by cslarson on Thu, 05/29/2008 - 10:07.
here is the edit for your paper, attached with track changes. good job with it.

Webmail

Submitted by dbartrom on Thu, 05/29/2008 - 10:12.
I really liked the way you set up your paper! The only thing I found was a few grammatical errors. I attached the document with the track changes clicked.

Good start

Submitted by eawilson on Thu, 05/29/2008 - 10:23.

I unfortunately started reviewing the old one you had posted, so rather than go back and put the new comments in, I'll send what I have in the file, then add the extra comments I have for the rest here.

You need transitions from section to section. Headings would definitely make a difference and allow the reader to see that he or she is moving on to a new step.

Some of the images might be too wide, allowing too little space for text to the side of it. See if you can shrink them, which will give the text more breathing room (makes it appear less "crunched" together).

Make sure you proofread carefully, and that you check your words. "Exiting" is spelled correctly in one instance, but you meant to say "existing."

You still need a conclusion of sorts (even sort of a "thanks for reading" type of thing might work), but you do have a good start. See the attached Word doc for the rest of my comments.

Web Mail - ALB

Submitted by ALBradley on Thu, 05/29/2008 - 10:23.

- In title: "Guide" and "Using" should be capitalized
-Log In: They are not "dialects" they're languages. Those aren't interchangeable.
-interrelated not hyphenated
-Your graphics are working for you very well. I especially like the icons you are using to display and explain the folders. I just may steal that Smiling It helps organize it very clearly.
-It's Web Mail not webmail. Make sure it's consistent throughout. You might want to run a search to see where you make it one word instead of two.
-Some of the graphics might be a little too large, like the delete/undelete and the purge deleted. They are not entirely necessary, so the hugeness makes them stick out a little.
-The inbox graphic- I would suggest either showing the whole inbox page or altering this somehow. Right now it's not really recognizable because it is so cropped down. Maybe even a border of the page color would represent the inbox more clearly.
-This looks great. It's really concise and still flows well. Great draft!