English 421K, Technical Writing

- First image has the class web address in the upper left hand corner.
-You may want to consider putting text between the Log In page graphic and the inbox graphic for clarity of separation.
-"Above these menus is a toolbar" is grammatically correct, but draws a lot of attention to itself. You may want to reword this in a more natural tone.
-"Some of the links are self explanatory while other need some explaining." Which are which? I'll feel stupid if I can't tell the difference. Maybe exclude this statement and just explain the ones that need it.
- Web Mail not Webmail
-SPELLING!
-Your text is a little dense, you may want to consider breaking it up in a way that flows a little more clearly. It's hard to follow a technical explanation in paragraph form.
-Your graphics may be a little large. Consider sizing them down or removing a few.

Very direct and to the point. I think you may be able to expand on it a little, maybe talk more about how to organize and mark emails, and describe some of the applications more, like "help".

I like what you have so far! I think it might be a little easier to read if the text was a little more broken up. Consider breaking some of it down into bullets, or something like that. I found one grammatical error, and it is the word "whenever" in the very last paragraph. I think it needs changed to "when".

Attached is my Word doc response to your paper so far.

Watch your grammar and punctuation.

Break up your paragraphs accordingly - when you begin a new thought, begin a new paragraph.

Keep capitalization consistent throughout - sometimes you have "Webmail," and others, you use "webmail."

Other comments are in the file. I hope it helps.