Bradley - Union

It's for a welcome pack or even a page in the Mortar Board. Thanks!
Submitted by ALBradley on Fri, 05/23/2008 - 19:03. categories [ ]

Again, going to post my

Submitted by eawilson on Fri, 05/23/2008 - 21:48.

Again, going to post my impressions here. Hope you don't mind.

1) Nice idea - I haven't seen anyone go this route in the class, so I think it's a great approach to take!
2) Short, sweet, and to the point. From my understanding, most students don't want to read a lot of information, especially in their mortar boards, so I think it's a great idea to keep it as short as you have. It gets the point across.
3) I like your language choice. It definitely works for your intended audience."
4) Design - you might want to experiment with different fonts and whatnot - even just different fonts for the header and/or body might make a difference and make it more visually appealing. I know it's a rough draft, though. Smiling
5) As with the SSINFO critique, watch the way you type out your URLs. They're usually not seen with capital letters in them, and it distracts me. I'm sorry to be nitpicky; I just don't think it looks "right."

It's pretty good so far. I think you're definitely on the right path. Good luck with your final draft, and if you need anything else, let me know.

Erin

revision

Submitted by cslarson on Fri, 05/23/2008 - 22:04.
i really like this. its short and to the point. you have great transitions through the paragraphs. good job