English 421K, Technical Writing

Hello,

I've attached my response as a Word document with "Track Changes" and comments enabled. If you have any questions, feel free to ask.

Thanks,
Erin

I like the pictures and your over all writing, and there's not much I could say that Erin already hasn't But I did think that you could "jazz" it up a little. Maybe play with fonts, colors, headings, ect. Your paper focuses a lot on the relaxed, fun side of the Union, but you don't really get that feel from the pathos of the paper.

I really like the layout of your paper, as well as the pictures... the photography is great! There isn't a lot for me to say that Erin hasn't already said either.

Other than that I really like the content and layout.

I also agree LanaRyan in that it could use some more spice... maybe try adding a Purdue logo or something of that nature on the opening page, to make it seem more like a "real" Purdue document that would be handed out to parents.

Let me know if you have any other questions!

Daniel

What I notice first is how well the images integrate with the information. Although, in the panorama of the Union hotel, your rug has two corners! Other than that I think they work well. The subtitles within the piece work well with the overall voice to convey a very relaxed and helpful tone, which is the purpose of this project. In your first paragraph, “ofGrant” is one word, so you may want to add a space. Overall I think this is great. You may want to consider adding a conclusion to review and summarize all the information given, and perhaps give a website or phone number that would lead to more information if a parent needed it. It works well for the audience it is trying to reach.