Wilson: PMU Description

Hello, group:

Attached is the PDF version of my PMU brochure. It's aimed at convention-goers, but can work just as well for anyone staying there. Again, since this is a PDF, you can type your responses in the comment box; I'll accept Word documents, too, if you write it there first.

Fonts do need to be changed, and I'm missing a couple of images. Apologies; my pictures didn't turn out very well, and I'll be retaking them over the weekend to correct the problem. However, the content and general idea is there. What I'd like you all to focus on is whether or not you think the content meshes with my intended audience. Is it too much? Too little? Too casual? What do you think about the visual approach I took?

Thanks for your responses. I look forward to seeing what you have put out.

See you Tuesday,
Erin

Submitted by eawilson on Thu, 05/22/2008 - 16:19. categories [ ]

Again, awesome. I like the

Submitted by LanaRyan on Fri, 05/23/2008 - 10:26.
Again, awesome. I like the brochures format, and the layout is very functional. Can't wait to see the finished product.

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Submitted by dbartrom on Fri, 05/23/2008 - 11:15.
Your brochure has really came together nicely since I saw it the first time! I like the layout, and especially like the way you have set it up some what like Q&A. I also feel like you did a really good job at catering the document to your target group.

The only thing that I thought needed some work was that the first two pages need some visuals, but I asuming those were the pictures you said you were missing.

Other than that I think the length is good, and so is the content!

Let me know if you need anything else!

Daniel

revisions

Submitted by cslarson on Fri, 05/23/2008 - 22:21.
i think that the last two pages could be combined into one page. i don't like the large empty space on the first page. the body of your brochure is very good though.

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Submitted by ALBradley on Fri, 05/23/2008 - 23:54.
This looks very professional and usable. I think it is just right for the target audience. There are a few things I found, and might suggest revising. First, I’m an adult and a good person but I giggled when I read “Purdue is proud to fulfill almost any of your needs.” This may be suggesting a bit too much. In the title I Have A Seminar or Conference......Where do I go?” the “A” should not be capitalized. Also, there should only be three dots, not six. Finally, the “W” in “Where” should not be capitalized. In the information that follows, I would double check if “North and South” should be capitalized, because I’m not sure they are being used in the proper capacity to be capitalized, but I might be wrong. The phrase “What Food Choices Do I Have?” seems a little awkward. You may want to reconsider the wording. Further into the information the titles seem to blur into the information. You may want to edit the text to separate the headings from the following info, by underlining or something. Same thing with the chart. At first glance it’s difficult to decipher that the left hand column is full of names, while the right column is full of descriptions. You may want to clarify this visual. The title “What About Something More…Upscale?” implies that the rest of the food is not great. The PMU would not want to suggest this about themselves in any capacity. Also, the “U” should not be capitalized. The image of the TV under the “Relax in our Lounges” heading seems unnecessary. Other than those few small things this looks great!