Hartmann - Revision Challenge

For a young person 10 - 15 years old to sit down with an attention span long enough to read the current document is asking quite a bit. Revising the webpage for their level would require breaking up the paragraphs and using more simple sentences. The paragraph concerning the elderly can be removed. Adding pictures will get the point across and help overcome the superman complex, "This can't happen to me." I also hope that the alcohol comment in the last paragraph isn't necessary for this age group.
Submitted by hartmand on Wed, 05/21/2008 - 08:51. categories [ ]