English 421K, Technical Writing

The website as it is now reads like a textbook. To really grab and inform pre-teens, it needs to read like a fasion or sports magazine article. There should be easily separated and defined setions, such as "Causes", "Symptoms", "Prevention", and "Treatment". The Symptom coloum could be a bulleted list clearly stating the basic symptoms and warning signs. Adding color, bolded and varied fonts, and pictures will grab attention. The language of the article should be "younger", with less technical terms and more descriptive phrases for those not familiar with scientific jargon. Putting the information in a magazine form will also allow for importnant information, such as prevention and treatment to be brought to attention and highlighted.