Bartrom - Frostbite and Hypothermia

I liked the information that is presented in the original article, as I believe all kids ages 10 to 15 years old need to be taught all of it.

I believe the organization of the document could be changed a little to make the web page easier to follow. I would have the following section headings: -An Introduction to Frostbite and Hypothermia -Hypothermia -Frostbite -Tips to Avoid Frostbite and Hypothermia

As for the style, I would try to write at a little lower reading level. I would leave out some of the wording, and possibly change some of the text in the paragraphs to bullets. This would make the main points much easier for people to recognize and understand.

I also feel like the design of the document could be improved upon so that it would not only be easier to read, but more enjoyable too. I would try and add some pictures of what the degrees of frostbite actually look at. I would also try to add some color to the page so that it wouldn't be so boring to look at.
Submitted by dbartrom on Wed, 05/21/2008 - 01:03. categories [ ]