English 421K, Technical Writing

The target audiance for this revised document is the principals and costodians of the schools(who wanted to nuke the scorpians by spraying large amounts of pesticides). Lois and IPM seem to be against the idea of using pesticides on the scorpions and so that part of the original document should definitly be on the revised one. I'd place the "chemical controls" part first in the new document. I'd follow it with the rest of the "management options" and "detection and monitoring" then include the "avoiding scorpion stings" and "first-aid for scorpion stings" sections. The rest can proabaly be placed at the back where only the the readers that are more interested in can go ahead and read or perhaps just not include those sections and say something like, "for mor information on the biology, identification, and stings of scorpions, please refer to the following website...etc...". Only including the sections that I did would go a long way to making this document more accessible to the people who need to use it.

In terms of making it more attractive and interesting to its readers and using the principles of design, perhaps she could use a three column grid so that she can include side bars and pictures. Also, maybe a colored header and footer at the top and bottom of the page would make it feel more balanced and stable. More consistent wording patters should be used for the headings as well as making them more specific(Detecting and Monitoring of Scorpions instead of Detection and Monitoring and Methods for Controlling Scorpions instead of Management Options). And if she chooses to use more colors, just to beware of contrast.