Form and Style

1. Does the letter include all the necessary components (return
   address, header, salutation, introductory paragraph, body paragraph(s),
   and conclusion)? If not, what’s missing?

Yes

2. Does the writer use block format (all text flush with the left margin)?

Yes

3. Does the style of the letter suit the occasion? Is it too informal? Too formal or generic? Explain.

I believe the letter does suit the occasion very well. It has followed the sample job application cover letter example very well.

4. Does the writer take the right tone? (E.g., come off as enthusiastic without gushing? highly qualified without bragging?) Explain.

Yes, it shows a great amount of confidence without being arrogant. He is confident in the skill sets he has gained over the past two summers and that he can make an influence and contribution immediately.

5. Are there any spelling or mechanical errors? If so, identify them, either by listing them here or by circling them on a printed draft.

"I am very intrigued by this networking position
with your nationally and internationally known organization, because of your success, I
am very intrigued by the networking position."

This seems to be a run-on sentence. I would break this up into two sentences. Maybe put a period after organization. Otherwise, it looks good.

Content/Rhetorical Context

1. Does the letter speak directly and specifically to the job ad,
   using keywords to organize the discussion of his or her qualifications?
   Even if it does, what could be done better? Yes, it does, but a bit more could be added to the third paragraph where persuasion and some explanation of skills is needed.
2. Does the writer mention specific reasons why he or she has applied for the position? Explain. Not exactly, you have mentioned that you are applying because you know of the company's success nationally and internationally. Something on what you would like to gain would help.
3. Does the writer identify specific skills, using terminology that other experienced people would recognize? Yes
4. Does the introductory paragraph identify the position applied for,
   its source, and then the major reason(s) why the writer is well-suited? Yes
5. Does the conclusion say how the writer can be contacted for further
   discussion or an interview? Does the letter end on a high note? Explain. Yes , you thank them for their time while listing your phone number and email address.
6. What is the most important revision the writer should make? Explain. Putting a little more into that third paragraph would be the most important revision in my opinion.

Form and Style

1. Does the letter include all
   the necessary components (return
   address, header, salutation, introductory paragraph, body paragraph(s),
   and conclusion)? If not, what’s missing?

The letter seems to include all the necessary components.

2. Does the writer use block
   format (all text flush with the left margin)?

Yes the writer used block format.

3. Does the style of the letter
   suit the occasion? Is it too informal? Too formal or generic? Explain.

I think this letter suits the occasion very well and I
cannot think of anything I would change.

4. Does the writer take the
   right tone? (E.g., come off as
   enthusiastic without gushing? highly qualified without bragging?)
   Explain.

I feel this writer takes the correct tone. This letter shows
my that Cameron wants the job but is not to overly excited about it. He stays
professional.

5. Are there any spelling or
   mechanical errors? If so, identify them,
   either by listing them here or by circling them on a printed draft.

I could not find any spelling or mechanical errors.

Content/Rhetorical Context

1. Does the letter speak
   directly and specifically to the job ad,
   using keywords to organize the discussion of his or her qualifications?
   Even if it does, what could be done better?

Yes this letter seems to be to a specific job ad. I really
cannot find anything to be done better. Every thing seems to have hit the mark
pretty well.

2. Does the writer mention
   specific reasons why he or she has applied for the position? Explain.

Yes they do. The reason for applying to this job was because
of the writers interest in the automotive industry.

3. Does the writer identify specific
   skills, using terminology that other experienced people would recognize?

Yes he does. He has networking skills that the company
should like in a new employee.

4. Does the introductory
   paragraph identify the position applied for,
   its source, and then the major reason(s) why the writer is well-suited?

Yes the introduction does all of these things I feel very
well.

5. Does the conclusion say how
   the writer can be contacted for further
   discussion or an interview? Does the letter end on a high note? Explain.

Yes he does. At the very bottom of the letter where it
should be.

6. What is the most important
   revision the writer should make? Explain.

This was a very good letter in my opinion, and I could not
find anything that I would change.

Here are some comments on your cover letter. Please email me at kamckelv@purdue.edu if you have any questions. Thanks,

Kevin