The topic you have chosen seems like a great one. It seems
like something the Wildcat Creek Foundation would be glad to incorporate and
something very useful to the people who come to visit. The only grammatical
change I would make to the proposal is in the second sentence in the client
section could be rephrased so there is only one and. The layout of the proposal
is effective and the sections are organized well. It seems that your group has
a pretty good idea of what you need to do for the project and how you are going
to do it.
I thought that your proposal draft was very good. It covered all of the information that i could see being relevant to the topic. It was formated very nicely and flowed very well. It should be good enough to work for this project. I think you guys are choosing a good topic that shouldnt be very hard and should be easily completed for this class. One thing you might want to do is check the document for spelling and grammer, i didnt see any but im the worst person when it comes to spelling and grammer. English isnt my subject.
Overall your draft of the proposal looked very good. The first thing I noticed about the document was that it is very organized and has defined sections. Each one of the sections has plenty of information to explain what your going to do and how. The topic was also a good choice, because it should be relatively easy to complete on time. I didnt see any grammetical errors, maybe a few sentences that could be shorted. But other than that looks greaT!
I liked your group's topic alot. I think that it is a good cause, and will help out. It looked very professional. I like how it was broken into sections, and still maintained a good flow. I don't see any trouble for you guys completing this in time for class. Grammar and everything else looked good. Nice job guys
We too are using a Google Application (Google Docs) for a good cause, and I really like your idea of showing the Wildcat Creek Foundation how to implement Google Maps into their website. Your proposal has been well written, and the format is similar to the way we set our proposal up, which in my opinion is effective. Something that may need to be added is who the proposal memo is to be addressed to at the start (Kevin McKelvey) and a closure paragraph at the end. Also add the group members names with email addresses at the end. These are things that we will have to add into our own proposal as well. Otherwise, everything else looks good, and each of your paragraphs are strong.
Overall, your proposal looked great. I liked your usage of headings to divide up the proposal content and make it easier to read and comprehend. It was very helpful to read your "main objective" because it allowed me to understand specifically and concisely what you were trying to accomplish! You might be able to elaborate on this paragraph a little bit more. Perhaps include a couple more details to the proposal section or give an abrievited explanation or detail about the mission you address in the last sentence? I like the client section a lot, this helped me to understand who the client is, why the technology benefits them, and what can be accomplished through the project. One thing that stood out to me the most is that you never really explained what google maps is. Now granted, most of our generation is firmiliar with this technology, the reality is that some people are not. Under the "Google Maps" section, I think it would be great if you included a sentence or two about what google maps is, before you address how it can benefit the Wildcat Creek Foundation. Overall it looks great and I think this is a good draft!!!!
Over all this is a great propsal. I like how you lay out who you are and who you are proposing to. The wording is really solid and not filled with fluff. One thing I would work on is the over all layout of the proposal. Make it more appealing to the eye so that the user knows you mean busniess. Also you should go more indepth about you group operation. It is imporant to not how things will get done and who will be doing what. The more detailed the better. Great job.
Comment on your proposal
The topic you have chosen seems like a great one. It seems
like something the Wildcat Creek Foundation would be glad to incorporate and
something very useful to the people who come to visit. The only grammatical
change I would make to the proposal is in the second sentence in the client
section could be rephrased so there is only one and. The layout of the proposal
is effective and the sections are organized well. It seems that your group has
a pretty good idea of what you need to do for the project and how you are going
to do it.
Barker: Response, proposal draft
I thought that your proposal draft was very good. It covered all of the information that i could see being relevant to the topic. It was formated very nicely and flowed very well. It should be good enough to work for this project. I think you guys are choosing a good topic that shouldnt be very hard and should be easily completed for this class. One thing you might want to do is check the document for spelling and grammer, i didnt see any but im the worst person when it comes to spelling and grammer. English isnt my subject.
Proposal Comment
Overall your draft of the proposal looked very good. The first thing I noticed about the document was that it is very organized and has defined sections. Each one of the sections has plenty of information to explain what your going to do and how. The topic was also a good choice, because it should be relatively easy to complete on time. I didnt see any grammetical errors, maybe a few sentences that could be shorted. But other than that looks greaT!
Proposal
I liked your group's topic alot. I think that it is a good cause, and will help out. It looked very professional. I like how it was broken into sections, and still maintained a good flow. I don't see any trouble for you guys completing this in time for class. Grammar and everything else looked good. Nice job guys
Group Proposal Draft Peer Review
We too are using a Google Application (Google Docs) for a good cause, and I really like your idea of showing the Wildcat Creek Foundation how to implement Google Maps into their website. Your proposal has been well written, and the format is similar to the way we set our proposal up, which in my opinion is effective. Something that may need to be added is who the proposal memo is to be addressed to at the start (Kevin McKelvey) and a closure paragraph at the end. Also add the group members names with email addresses at the end. These are things that we will have to add into our own proposal as well. Otherwise, everything else looks good, and each of your paragraphs are strong.
Proposal Draft Comment
Overall, your proposal looked great. I liked your usage of headings to divide up the proposal content and make it easier to read and comprehend. It was very helpful to read your "main objective" because it allowed me to understand specifically and concisely what you were trying to accomplish! You might be able to elaborate on this paragraph a little bit more. Perhaps include a couple more details to the proposal section or give an abrievited explanation or detail about the mission you address in the last sentence? I like the client section a lot, this helped me to understand who the client is, why the technology benefits them, and what can be accomplished through the project. One thing that stood out to me the most is that you never really explained what google maps is. Now granted, most of our generation is firmiliar with this technology, the reality is that some people are not. Under the "Google Maps" section, I think it would be great if you included a sentence or two about what google maps is, before you address how it can benefit the Wildcat Creek Foundation. Overall it looks great and I think this is a good draft!!!!
Over all this is a great
Over all this is a great propsal. I like how you lay out who you are and who you are proposing to. The wording is really solid and not filled with fluff. One thing I would work on is the over all layout of the proposal. Make it more appealing to the eye so that the user knows you mean busniess. Also you should go more indepth about you group operation. It is imporant to not how things will get done and who will be doing what. The more detailed the better. Great job.