I received an e-mail today from my best friend from high school; she’s just had a baby a few days ago. It’s impossible to be happier for her, but the awareness hit me much later that she’s only 19. I’m sure she’s capable of being a mother, but she’s still to young herself, she hasn’t had a chance yet to enjoy being young, or learning more about herself that comes usually in the early 20’s. My friend is not the first to have a baby at her age, nor is she the last, or even the youngest. Today’s youth is being pressured to grow up sooner and sooner from subtle sources no one even takes notice of in the media. The media I will be discussing focuses on toys, News/TV/Movies, and Society/Social Interactions.
I really like the way that
I really like the way that you have related the topic with an anicdote, however, I'm not sure what your thesis is. I can see where you are going with your paper thought which is a good thing! I felt like this paragraph isn't finished. It's a great start!
I believe you wanted this
I believe you wanted this to be your thesis:
"The media I will be discussing focuses on toys, News/TV/Movies, and Society/Social Interactions."
(of course I could be totally wrong)... I don't know that this statement includes an argument. Also, I usually advise that students avoid referring to their writing within their writing. Statements such as "I chose to write about" or "I will talk about this" make the paper sound like an essay that is responding to a prompt. While technically this is the case -- and perhaps this is the tragic flaw of college composition classes -- I want you all to "break free" of the proverbial college essay and imagine a wider audience. What would you say if you were writing this essay to the parents of teens? If you knew your parents would be reading it? If it was being published in a parenting magazine?
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