What and impressive job application! You have organized and presented your job application in such a way that the reader can clearly see what you can offer to the company. I like everything you say about your experience regarding this position. It looks like you are focus and you know what you want do in your professional career. Your job application look complete and I don’t think that I can give you anymore suggestion. The demand for the job market in your field of study is very high and the salary is attractive. Keep up the good work I wish you the best.

I too was impressed with how you presented all of your information. I think you did a really nice job breaking down all of your job experience and qualities. The only thing like many of us that I would work on is tying it into some tasks you will be doing at your new job if you get the position. Nice job overall.

I was impressed of you got to the point and presented yourself in a very well organized way that did not come off to be arrogant. I think that you did a great job of not adding unneccessary details and you were always head on with what you wanted to say. There are really no areas of improvement for you that I can see off hand that would be detrimental to you getting a job. I think that the only room for improvement that I would say, that would not be noticable to others, would be to had what some more of your past experiences entailed. Terrific job overall though!!!

1. Does the letter include all the necessary components (return address, header, salutation, introductory paragraph, body paragraph(s), and conclusion)? If not, what’s missing?
*Yes, the letter contains all of the necessary components.
2. Does the writer use block format (all text flush with the left margin)?
*Yes, the writer uses block format.
3. Does the style of the letter suit the occasion? Is it too informal? Too formal or generic? Explain.
*The style of the letter suits the occasion. The writer is professional but at the same time not overly formal.
4. Does the writer take the right tone? (E.g., come off as enthusiastic without gushing? highly qualified without bragging?) Explain.
*Yes, the writer uses the right tone. The writer uses words such as “hardworking, dedicated and well organized” to promote themselves to be highly qualified for the job.
5. Are there any spelling or mechanical errors? If so, identify them, either by listing them here or by circling them on a printed draft.
*In the sentence “already taken classes to better prepare me to being work in the pharmacy”, I would suggest for this to state “already taken classes to better prepare me to work in the pharmacy.”

“I also did a program at a local hospital…” I would suggest to replace ‘did’ with completed.

1. Does the letter speak directly and specifically to the job ad, using keywords to organize the discussion of his or her qualifications? Even if it does, what could be done better?
*I think the letter speaks directly and specifically to the job ad. There are many keywords that describe. I think the letter is good as is except for some recommendations I previously listed.
2. Does the writer mention specific reasons why he or she has applied for the position? Explain.
*Yes the writer mentions specific reasons why they applied for the position. The writer is in pre pharmacy and states, “Rotech Healthcare would make a great start for my career.”
3. Does the writer identify specific skills, using terminology that other experienced people would recognize?
*The writer identifies skills such as being hardworking dedicated, and well organized. The writer also states being knowledgeable with Microsoft and OSX programs.
4. Does the introductory paragraph identify the position applied for, its source, and then the major reason(s) why the writer is well suited?
*Yes, the introductory paragraph identifies the position, Pharmacy Technician, its source, Monster.com, and reasons why the writer is well suited, upbeat personality and great communication skills.
5. Does the conclusion say how the writer can be contacted for further discussion or an interview? Does the letter end on a high note? Explain.
*Yes, the conclusion includes an email address and a phone number so the writer can be contacted. The letter ends on a high note by thanking the company for their time and consideration and hope so hear from them soon.
6. What is the most important revision the writer should make? Explain.
* The most important revision the writer should make is to change some of the simple words such as ‘did’ to more descriptive words. Overall I think this letter is in great shape and I hope my suggestions and comments help!

First of all, I think it is great to have both a major and minor because it not only shows you are interested in many things, but it also shows you are motivated to devote time and effort to your education. I like your word use because you say things like 'upbeat personality' and 'serving a smile' which is clever because your personality gets to comes out. Having shadowing experience is beneficial too because the company can see they you know what the job position would entail. You got to work alongside pharmacy technicians and see for yourself if it would be something you would enjoy doing. The best part was emphasizing being able to work in intense situations because pressure and time constraints will come will any job. Overall, I think your letter really stood out and hot all of the necessary components.